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may be only 500 words, but the admissions essay portion
of a college application can mean the difference between
acceptance and rejection. How you write your personal
essay shows the admissions committee why you are
different from everybody else. It provides information
about you that test scores, grades, and extracurricular
pursuits just cannot. You can use the essay to describe
a favorite activity, to tell a story about yourself, or
even a story about your dog, but make sure to really
use it -- in a way that captures the readers
attention and shows that you are exceptional.
Step One: Brainstorming
You should expect to devote about one to two weeks
simply thinking up possible essay subjects. From this
process of brainstorming, you may find a topic you had
not thought of at first. Here are some questions to
consider:
What
Are You Like?
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What is your strongest personality trait? Does any
attribute, quality, or skill distinguish you from
everyone else? How did you develop this attribute?
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How would your friends characterize you? What would
they write about if they were writing your
admissions essay for you?
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Consider your favorite books, movies, works of art,
etc. Have these influenced your life in a meaningful
way? Why are they your favorites?
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Have you experienced a moment of epiphany, as if
your eyes were opened to something to which you were
previously blind?
What
Have You Done?
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What are your major accomplishments, and why do you
consider them accomplishments?
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What have you done outside of the classroom that
demonstrates qualities sought after by universities?
Of these, which means the most to you?
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Have you ever struggled mightily for something and
succeeded? What made you successful? Have you ever
struggled mightily for something and failed? How did
you respond?
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What was the most difficult time in your life, and
why? How did your perspective on life change as a
result of the difficulty?
Where
Do You Want to Go?
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Of everything in the world, what would you most like
to be doing right now? Where would you most like to
be? Who, of everyone living and dead, would you most
like to be with?
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What are your dreams of the future? When you look
back on your life in thirty years, what would it
take for you to consider your life successful?
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How does this particular university fit into your
plans for the future? Why do you want to spend two
to six years of your life at a particular school?
Step
Two: Selecting an Essay Topic
As
these thoughts start to solidify into an essay topic,
think about execution. What sounded like a good idea
might prove impossible in the writing. Most importantly,
think of how you can make the subject matter original.
Even seemingly boring essay topics can sound interesting
if creatively approached. With an essay question in
mind, think over the following questions:
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Will your topic only repeat information listed
elsewhere on your application? If so, pick a new
topic. Dont mention GPAs or standardized test scores
in your essay.
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Can you offer vivid supporting paragraphs to your
essay topic? If you cannot easily think of
supporting paragraphs with concrete examples, you
should probably choose a different essay topic.
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Will an admissions officer remember your topic after
a day of reading hundreds of essays? What will the
officer remember about your topic? What will the
officer remember about you? What will your lasting
impression be?
Choose a Story
The best essays tell a story about the applicant. The
essay does not have to be the story of your whole life,
but rather a small glimpse of it, one that is rich with
meaning and alive with imagery. It often helps to think
about the impact that past events have had on you. In
one admissions essay written by a student who was
accepted to Harvard, Princeton, Dartmouth, and Stanford,
an ordinary story is told in a unique and captivating
way. In this narrative about hiking up a mountain, the
student also conveys a deep appreciation for science, as
well as a dedication to the hard work required to fully
understand the universe:
Although the first few miles of the hike up Mt. Madison
did not offer fantastic views, the vistas became
spectacular once I climbed above tree line. Immediately,
I sensed that understanding the natural world parallels
climbing a mountain. Much like every step while hiking
leads the hiker nearer the mountain peak, all knowledge
leads the scientist nearer total understanding.
Entitled "Hiking to Understanding," this essay tells the
story of one hike, but at the same time, gives a
complete idea of the authors values, interests, and
philosophy. Thus, the essay presents run-of-the-mill
subject matter in an out-of-the-ordinary way.
Step
Three: Writing the Essay
You must bear in mind your two goals: to persuade the
admissions officer that you are extremely worthy of
admission and to make the admissions officer aware that
you are more than a GPA and a standardized score, that
you are a real-life, intriguing personality. But before
you can convince an admissions officer of this, you must
first grab his or her attention.
The
Introduction
Most admissions officers spend at most 2 minutes reading
your essay. With this reality in mind, spend the most
time on your introduction. One technique is to create
mystery or intrigue in this first paragraph. At the very
least, you should not give away the whole story right at
the beginning. Give the admissions officer a reason to
keep reading. As an example, the first sentence of the
"Hiking" essay reads as follows:
Surrounded by thousands of stars, complete silence, and
spectacular mountains, I stood atop New Hampshire's
Presidential Range awestruck by nature's beauty.
This first sentence sets the mood for the essay, it
draws the reader into the scene, but it does not state
the authors argument or even the plot of the story to
follow. The reader has to continue reading in order to
learn what happens next.
The
Body
After the first paragraph has been perfected, you must
ensure that the body paragraphs relate to the
introduction. It helps to have a theme or phrase that
runs throughout the entire essay. In "Hiking to
Understanding," the author uses the mountain as a
unifying image:
Some
people during their lives climb many small hills.
However, to have the most accurate view of the world, I
must be dedicated to climbing the biggest mountains I
can find. Too often people simply hike across a flat
valley without ascending because they content themselves
with the scenery. The mountain showed me that I cannot
content myself with the scenery.
Also notice that the author uses simple language. Many
students think that big words make good essays, but
powerful ideas are often best expressed in simple and
elegant prose.
Another way to impress an admissions officer is by using
specific examples and evocative touches of imagery that
stay clear of cliche. The application essay lends itself
to imagery, since the entire essay requires your
experiences as supporting details. Successful essays
stick to the mantra, "show, dont tell." Heres one
example from the "Hiking" essay:
When
night fell upon the summit, I stared at the slowly
appearing stars until they completely filled the night
sky. Despite the windy conditions and below freezing
temperatures, I could not tear myself away.
This passage shows how description of the stars and cold
can make us both imagine the scenery and understand the
authors point of view. It tells us what the author feels
and thinks, more so than if the author had spelled it
out for us.
Finishing Up
The conclusion is your last chance to persuade the
reader or impress upon them your qualifications. Expand
upon the broader implications of your discussion. The
"Hiking" essay does this successfully, both expanding on
the description of the scene as well as on the scenes
meaning for the author:
When
observing Saturn's rising, the Milky Way Cloud, and the
Perseid meteor shower, I simultaneously felt a great
sense of insignificance and purpose. Obviously, earthly
concerns are insignificant to the rest of the universe.
However, I experienced the overriding need to understand
the origins and causes of these phenomena.
Dont be surprised if the writing process takes many
days. Few writers can dash out a quality essay in just a
few sittings. It takes awhile to find the perfect
structure, wording, and imagery. If you have the time,
spend a week away from your draft; when you return to
it, you will read it with fresh eyes. Ask friends and
family for help. Other readers will find small mistakes
that your brain has ceased to recognize, and they will
answer the essential question, "what makes this essay
memorable?"
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